BA3A Week 1
Feedback on my research report proposal (first draft of first chapter): Strengths: Good report proposal, good topic Already begun conducting research (although take care when citing to use the Harvard style rather than footnotes) Sensible to start with Disney, providing useful historical context for the topic Writing style is enjoyable to read Journal shows a good understanding of areas I’ll need to develop Areas to improve: First chapter is rather sketchy, several important details are missing or brushed over too quickly Try and access a wider range of research sources (recommended ‘The Illusion of Life’ by Frank Thomas/Ollie Johnston, and a book on semiotics) Try not to rely on blogs too much Avoid talking ‘to’ the reader, e.g. ‘First, let’s take a look at’ Some relevant images would be really helpful